I know this is way late, but i hope it'll help a bit, too.
I'll suggest something that is not always accepted by some people, but it holds a lot of merit: Copy other artists.
add that to your regimen of life drawing and anatomy-book reading, and you'll see yourself developing faster and better than you thought. Part of the issue with copying other artists is that you'll also be copying their mistakes. So, by additionally doing life drawing and reading the anatomy books, you'll hopefully overcome that.
I just saw the pages on your dA account. You really have to consider drawing realistically before getting into anime. I think the figure work isn't very good at all, and the facial proportions isn't right. It's not a bad thing because you seem to want to improve. The reason it's off is because you haven't studied the real thing. "To break the rules, you must first learn the rules."
Your story telling isn't up to par. I found myself lost sometimes. Not a lot, but sometimes I had to guess where I had to read next. Nothing in the page layout was intuitive. Study a lot of your favorite artist's story telling, and see WHY what they do works. There's a formula. If you're showing to a western based people [with people who have languages like english, french spanish, german etc], we read LEFT to RIGHT, so things move faster and better if you send things in that direction.
Another thing to keep in mind is panel breaks [like on pages 3,5, and 6]. I'm personally biased to this, because I don't really like panel breaks too much, but in your case, It makes the pages hard to read. I think a general rule to follow is that if it's closest to you, or the action is too great, break the panel. You can amend your own rules, but I personally try to keep those two in mind. Sometimes you want to isolate a moment, like on page 5. I think that the face on the bottom is not important, since its behind something smaller. If you reverse it and make the head super impose [break the panels and what not], it lets you see him as a key character.
One thing, that I've been told in my art as well, is that your not getting "the hook" right. There isn't one thing in the page that grabs you. Nothing that makes it memorable, so our stuff can be pretty bland. Try to think of it as a pinup turned into a page. It has to be subtle, but it helps for it to be there.
Don't be discouraged. If you want to be good, you gotta destroy your mistakes. I read on dA that you and your friend are on a sabbatical to get better. That's the shit right there. Post on this forum a lot. these guys are the best. and while we can be harsh sometimes, it's all to be used to better your art. You can't be the champ if you pull punches, so knuckle up and get in there and kick some major ass ^__^
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